Here is my first attempt this year at persuasive writing

Dear Hekia Parata

RE: Holidays are way too short !!!!!!!

Holidays are too short!. In my opinion we should have three weeks and I know and believe that you will agree with me with these reason I have declared below.

On the first week we can have for sleeping in and staying up late and have the time of your life. The next week we can have friends,family,go and travel and go to the movies.Finally on the last week we can get everything ready like clothes,charging your chromebook and everything else. The holidays would be perfect BUT because we only have two weeks that means we have the one week to ourself but the next week you can't have fun with your family cause you need to get ready for school.

My next reason is the teachers while we go and relax and have hot cakes from Mcdonald's,the teacher have to do work. They have to do the walls,change how the class looks and choose what to do for next term and when they are done the holidays are G-O-N-E-gone! . I also once spotted Miss Simmons in Room three and she was dragging her sleeping bag and holding her pillows. she also had her toothbrush and toothpaste and had her PJs “ how horrible” I thought “ they don’t have a break at all!.

Lastly if you hurt yourself really bad you wouldn’t have any time to recover for example I broke my arm on the last week and I couldn’t do anything. I was command yes command to stay on the couch the whole time. so my holidays where boring and I also wasted all my time I was so upset that I cried till dinnertime so think about it would you rather waste your weekend or have three weeks , have time to recover and do everything?.

I strongly believe that holidays should be three weeks not two! I

hope and know you will agree with me.

Yours sincerely

Sarah Niven

word of the week

A time I was persuasive...sarah niven

A time I was persuasive...

Think of and share a time when you have REALLY wanted something or you have DESPERATELY wanted to go somewhere (perhaps you wanted a new part for your scooter, another piece of motocross equipment, a new item of clothing?  Perhaps you wanted a friend to come over, some money to go to the dairy or to be taken to the movies?)  How did you persuade someone to your point of view or get them to agree or give in to what you wanted?  What language did you use?  What did you say?  Did you promise them something in return?

I had to persuade my mum to get me a chromebook

• I had to say things like…
• “but everyone in my class has one.

• “ I will take care of it so good.I will clean the screen and wipe off the dust.
• If you do this then i will not fight to going to bed.
• And i had to change my voice into a casting voice.
• I didn’t persuade my mum but i persuade my step dad because he heard me.